这篇博客记录6月下旬学习写作过程中遇到的一些问题/错题，主要是一个复盘。
复盘材料：雅思小作文扇形图和雅思大作文
扇形图复盘
首先要注意的是
account for/ make up/ constitute/ represent，它们的主语一定不是the percentage/proprotion of…。只能是人或事物。
建议：The majority of sales/comsuption in xxx comes from 占的主语/物品, with exactly x %.
XXX主语 accouts for x%
最小的写法
There is merely 5% of total xxx gernerated by xxx
表示xxx差不多，数值不大的
第二段开头写
Initially, when we look at the breakfast and lunch segments of each chart, it seems that throughout all three nutrients have approximately the same value.
占 accout for/ share/ contribute
Make up/show/xxx comes from..
陈述数据 Breakfast shows 14%(sodium),16%(saturated fat)and 16%(added sugar), whereas（而） lunch was 29%, 26%and 19%
递进，看下一个饼图就可以说 Moving on to the other two meals，we can clearly see….
讲两幅图的比列
Dinner ranged from 43%to 23% and snacks had the inverse trend, ranging from 14% to 42%.
犯罪类（Crime Justice System)
注意不要用deterrance，这个指大的威慑如核打击威慑，一般个人犯罪用deterrant
思考方向考虑
1.Deterrant（威慑）
- Rehabilitation(重新改造），如加强法律教育
3.Punishment（惩罚）如罚款服刑。
4.Reintegration（重返社会），如提供培训减少失业等
5.Protection（保护）如设置视频监控，增加警察数量等
6.Compensation（赔偿）
A deterrent effect
Escape punishment
Prevent crime
Curb crime 遏制犯罪
Combat crime 打击犯罪
Commit a crime 犯罪
Break laws
Violate laws 触犯法律
Catch criminals 抓捕犯罪
An escaping criminal 在逃罪犯
Armed police
Carry weapons
弱势群体（女人/老人）
考虑方向有
1.education （接受教育的机会增多）
拓展女性受教育机会增多，可以学到管理知识，可以像男人一样有效管理公司，平等。->性别差距不断缩小。
2.科技发展 (减少体力和身体要求）
3.老年人：身体原因，缺乏与外界的接触->lead to 家庭经济负担，阻碍创新，不适合工作等
4.女性：(企业注意的特质：细心，可能涉及考虑的有：生育影响事业，身体原因，同理心情绪化）
Gender discrimination
Discriminations on the grounds of sex Gender bias
Gender equality
The equal access to education 教育平等
Gender differences
Gender gap narrows
Managerial skills 管理技能
Members of the board 董事会成员
Shatter the glass ceiling 打破职位提升的障碍
Male-dominated industries 男性占主导地位的行业
Clerical work 白领工作
Juggle different roles 扮演不同角色
Balance work and family commitments
Domestic responsibility
Domestic work
Child-rearing duty
Raise children
High-paying industries 高薪工作
Advance one’s career 发展…的事业
A fullfilling career
Career success
Take different factors into consideration 考虑不同的因素
Older people
The elderly 老者
Senior citizens 年长者
The older generation
Out of touch with the world 跟不上时代
Resistant to change抵触改变
Old-fashioned ideas
Fit into the modern world
Adopt advanced technology
Sensible advice
Life experience
Take risks
Make a rash decision 轻率的做决定
一些词伙
对教育科技话题的投资和支持
From less well-off backgrounds 来自贫穷的家庭
Disadvantaged students
Children from poor homes
Exempted from tuition 免除学费
Drop out of school
Educational equality
Free-interest loans 无息贷款
Break the cycle of poverty 摆脱贫困
Bridge the gap between rich and poor 减少贫富差距
=close the economic divide
医药方面
Easier access to medical services
Public hospitals
Medical equipment
Clinical experience 临床经验
Receive medical treatments 接受治疗
Contract an illness 患病
High medical expenses 高额医药费
A long waiting list
Medical research
Improve our health
In the pharmacy industry 医药行业
Invent new drugs
Cure diseases
Previously incurable diseases 之前不可治愈的病
科技有关
Technological advances 科技进步
State-funded scientific research 由政府资助的科学研究
Scientific institutions
Technological innovations 技术创新
Advanced technology
State-of-the-art technology 顶尖技术
Technological breakthroughs 技术突破
Medical advances
Technological change
New technology
Cutting-edge technology 高新技术
The hi-tech industry 高新技术产业
电脑/网络有关
Web-based technnology 网络科技
Teleworking/telecommuting/work at home 远程办公
Shop online
Travel to work
Travel a long distance to work
Save time
Attend meetings
In a formal setting 正式场合
Work from home
Attend online courses 上网课
Face-to-face communication 面对面交流
Avoid rush-hour traffic 避开交通高峰时段
Social networking websites 社交网站
commucation有关
Face to face commucation
Human interaction 人际交往
Facial expression
Avoid misunderstandings
Listen to others
A good commucator
Form strong relationships
Communication skills
Interpret messages
Body language
A sign of respect 以示尊敬
A good listener
Spend quality time 度过宝贵时光
A sense of isolation 孤立感
农业科技
Increase yields
Grow crops
A good harvest 收成很好
Apply pesticides
Food prices
Genetic engineering
Resistant to pests 抗虫害
Food production
Cultivate crops 种庄稼
Chemical fertilisers 化肥
Pest disease
GM food 基因食品
High-yield crops 高产量庄稼
Improve productivity 提高生产力
Do repetitive tasks 执行重复任务
Reduce the workforce 减少劳动力
Mechanised assembly lines 机械化装配线
Automate the process 过程自动化
Computerise the servise 服务电脑化
Improve efficiency
Replace human labour
Mechanise tasks
Mechanised farming
Done by hand
Industrial robot
工作有关
Lose jobs
The jobless rate 失业率
Create jobs 创造就业机会
Make a living
Earn money
Live comfortably
Out of work 失业
Reduce unemployment 减少失业机会
Provide job opportunities
Earn salaries
Feed family 养家
太空科技
Space missions 太空任务
Space science
Habitable planets 适合居住的星球
Provide shelter for
Used commercially
In the hostile environment 在恶劣的环境中
Population explosion
Sustain our civilization 保护我们的文明
城市相关
Relocate to cities 搬去城市
Keep pace with the demand 满足需求
Afford home ownership 买得起房子
Population expansion
Low income people
Employment opportunities
Reduce the quality of life
A growing population
Put pressure on 增加压力
Transport costs
Curb private car use 限制私人汽车使用
Rush-hour traffic
房子有关
Housing shortage 住房短缺
Urban planning 城市规划
Densely populated cities 人口很多的城市
Redevelop run-down urban areas
Make room for 为什么提供空间
Housing market
Residential buildings 住宅楼
Provincial towns 乡镇
State housing 国家房
Housing developers 房地产开发商
High-rise building 高层建筑
Land-scarce cities 土地稀缺城市
Meet the growing demand for housing 满足对住房日益增长的需求
文化和价值观
Achieve happiness
A higher standard of living
Driven by self-interest 受自身利益驱使
Make easy money 不劳而获
其他
More and more -> inreasingly
(only 问题）大作文第一段最后一句 I think that it is justifiable to…because of…（a range of factors)
In the meantime, it is quite reasonable to ..
Perfect 是否有比较级more perfect存在争议，不建议使用。
结尾：I would argue that
A good command of …. Is a clear-cut advantage both at work and in daily life.
